I just want a critique?

Sounds like an interesting story, I would have kept on reading if you had wrote more. You hit the spot on imagery, but it was a little too much. When describing the world you want to keep it descriptive, but not too long or short, too keep readers from becoming bored. IMO the names voctrus and zorac were a little lame. Personally I think authors overuse characters with names starting with k,v, x or z's in their sci-fi stories. Keeping names catchy is important in a novel with many characters because readers can better memorize people.(That's just my opinion, don't take it personally. If you feel the opposite go with your gut feeling.)